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We are still waiting for the thunder from the distant stars,
The echo of mortality,
the whispers of a storm, half-remembered,
in sepia-coloured hallways in buildings that smell like books.
Time gets slow in waiting,
ghosts are formed from the wanting,
taking shape in the spaces where sunlight,
or moonlight doesn't touch.
The stars shake from the vibration,
and the ghosts shimmer in anticipation,
but we can't hear your voice in the dead of the night.
I was watching a youtube video about " Why is night dark?" and at one point they likened the universe to a thunderstorm, and said the first line of the poem. After a quick perusal of the comments section- no one had realised how pretty that line was- they were too busy having a science/ religious debate. [link]
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Given 2013-01-26
Waiting by ~PrideofPanem Deviant suggested by many others. ( Suggested by Laeneris and Featured by Nichrysalis )
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burning-girl Featured By Owner Mar 13, 2013
can i fuck you
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student General Artist
Excuse me? O.o
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Jan 28, 2013  Professional Writer
This is beautiful, and your description in the artist comments adds a nice layer to it as well. It's nice sometimes to stop arguing over and analyzing the universe and just indulge in its beauty.
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you
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ObsidianShepherd Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013   Writer
Love this!
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you, I'm glad you love it :D
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ivory-phills Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
*snaps in applause like a poetry slam audience* This was good, my sista. A beautiful way of creating imagery and surreal atmosphere. B)
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you very much :D
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ivory-phills Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome! :)
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SuperFanLoveraxl Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
Beautiful work..................:iconclapplz:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you very much :D
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SuperFanLoveraxl Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013
Your welcome~!^^ :iconhappiexplz:
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healingbrushstroke Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is really beautiful!
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you very much
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Abraxas-within Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I've watched the video before and was struck by that statement too. I really don't get why the comments section of pretty much every youtube video becomes grounds for a god debate. Anyways, this poem's imagery is amazing, and i love how seamlessly each sentence flows into the next. Great job, I'm going to go lurk in your gallery now.
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
I know why the comments sections dissolve into religious debates- because people have nothing better to do than argue about when the earth was created on the internet.
Thank you so much :D And have fun :D
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Purple-Panda-SxR Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013   Writer
Both that video and this poem raise a lot of questions. It's a shame that a lot of people can't just see the beauty in some things.
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Sometimes people are too focused on one thing and don't take time to appreciate other things.
It happens.
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Jewel16000 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
I mean for waiting that long.
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Jewel16000 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Digital Artist
You must have miserable or waiting that long.
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
This is brilliant as the stars you write about. And I love the source, and totally understand! I do that too.

P.S. I print out my favorite poems and keep them in my wallet so I can carry them wherever I go. This one is definitely going in the collection.
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much. I feel so honoured :D
If my wallet wasn't so full of pennies I'd do that too- that sounds like a fantastic idea!
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
Bwahahaha! Of all coins, why do you have so many pennies in there?!
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student General Artist
Er, Because I spend all the other coins first...?
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Student Writer
I UNDERSTAND
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ElektraSnibson Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Whoa...I love it! It has a nice and dark/mysterious feel to it, with the real beauty hidden right below the surface. Well done.
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much :D
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ElektraSnibson Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Your welcome, no prob. :iconlaplz:
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SovereignSin Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student Writer
OhMyGod, PANEM! CONGRATULATIONS! :D
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
THANKS! :D :D :D
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is so brilliantly written. :love:
I love the lines: in sepia-coloured hallways in buildings that smell like books. And: ghosts are formed from the wanting,
taking shape in the spaces where sunlight,
or moonlight doesn't touch.


A really nice read - congrats on your DD. :clap:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much! :D
I haven't read the poem in a while so reading those lines again gave me chills... :P
I'm so glad you enjoyed it
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IyraEMM Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That's how you know lines are pretty dang good, when they give their own creator chills :bucktooth:
I really did, and you're welcome!
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CanveySue Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
Lovely
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you
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JackieStarSister Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
This is excellent, really nicely done!
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much :D
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Zee-Who Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist
Congrats on your Daily Deviation!:squee::heart:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much!
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TheDorsai Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Chills
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
:D
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you so much :D
You have a lovely day as well.
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jan 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure, thank you :happybounce:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
OHMYGOSH congrats on your DD beautiful! :iconlainloveplz:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Thanks :D I'm so happy right now :D :woohoo:
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I WAS SO EXCITED WHEN I SAW

it started in all caps but then I felt really creepy D:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013  Student General Artist
Lol. Don't feel creepy for using all caps
It would only be creepy if you were in person actually shouting at me :P
IT WOULD BE TERRIFYING IF COMMENTS WERE SOUNDBYTES.
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2013
What an interesting piece.
Congratulations on your D.D!
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