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Black streets in the dawning light
we punch out dissonant tap dances 
in high heels grinding out freedom
on the south side of suburbia
we remember the lost stars
and wonder if we're just faking,
or if our souls have curled up 
in the night and relinquished
 their heartbeats to the sound
of the storms of traffic.

Cultural obsessions hold bottles
of vodka, wishing they could feel
the bacterial cultures bunching 
in their battered chests.
Hyper but flaccid 
we slump behind screens 
and pour out missives in broken english
pushing keys into our fingers 
slip sliding into madness 
and sadness, and when we die,
we do it for the lulz. 
Canadian History class produces some really weird depressing poetry for me...
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This piece as amazing imagery. I hung in their till the end simply for all the images that were running through my mind. :faint: You have a lovely way with words, and that final line? Superb. :love:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Student General Artist
Thank you very much :D I'm really glad you feel that way :D :blush:
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OfOneSoul Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome, sweetheart! :tighthug:
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chazcartier Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the pictures this creates in my mind are beautiful and mesmerizing... :wormnomnom:
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Student General Artist
That's what I aim for :D
Thank you :D I just don't know why you'd eat a worm over it :P
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chazcartier Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
you're welcome! ;P
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"Hyper but flaccid" I love that semblance of words.

I know what you mean, too. I used to get so depressed during history class, as I learned over and over the ways people would fail. It's a little dismaying to look at things in the long term.
#YOLO
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PrideofPanem Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2012  Student General Artist
I was watching one of my favourite shows- Face Off when they mentioned how one of the judges used very big words all the time- one of them was flaccid, and I really wanted to use it in a poem.
and I'm such a hipster I say Carpe Diem. :P
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